TLoZ: Midna Chronicles

Okay I've done the Prolouge and Volume 1... Besides the fact that I haven't done anything but set the Scene and start the Storyline what do you think so far?

Story Spoiler:

Spoilers in Stories don't bother me but it does bother some people so Highlight above to see spoiler.

EDIT: I've Read through it and the First chapters a bit Shit but thats how I learn

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Anyone... No opinions? Is it so Perfect you're lost for words?

Looks pretty fine. Just need to fix some punctuation and grammar. Example.

Quote :

One Year since Link and Midna fought the ferocious Battle against Ganandorf and Zant. The Twilight Princess Midna ressumed her posistion as the Ruler of the Twilight Realm, After destroying the Mirror of Twilight She was cut off from the Light Realm, This didn't Upset her, the thing that upset her was the Fact she would never see Link again, Espescially since the Mirror is Unfixable*.

You have put some comma's where you could use full stops in some places, and you will put random starting letters capital. All highlighted in bold was what I found wrong.
*Instead of using a non-existing word, use a real one! Unrepairable is a good one.

Thanks... But where I live Unfixable IS a word... sorry. My keyboard was not working properly when I typed it... Damn Wireless .

Edit: I've Edited the Proluge and Ep 1 to make it more Interesting and correct Mistakes... Also Finished Ep 2.